By Thomas and Benicio
This poem talks about a man that is under the water drowning, so he started shaking the hand for somebody to come and help him. But people instead thought that he was waving, saying “hi”. The tone of the poem is dark, sad, you can imagine a person alone, in a room, talking about something sad. The voice seems to come from a narrator, 3rd person, that knows what happened and the feelings of people.
“It must have been too cold for him his heart gave way”= It is a metaphor. It wants to say that he couldn’t stand that people passed away without helping him.
“Heard him” = It is an alliteration. It wants to say that someone did or did not heard him, put attention on what he was saying.
“loved larking” =It is an alliteration. It wants to say that someone loves something, in this place, larnking.
First you have to prepare what you are going to write. Then you have to write what you prepare. How?
The first thing is your argument. Write your arguments about the poem/what you are reading. Then it comes the evidence (you have to give evidence to your arguments). It can be with quotes. The next step, and the most important, is your analysis. Here you will include all the things you see, reed, understand, etc. Then you do a transition to the next paragraph. And finally you do all this again.
When you finish writing you have a limited time to check if all is good.
Good points: He does a very good analysis. He uses appropriate vocabulary and talks with great posture. He separates in paragraphs. He talks in a way where is simple to read and think about what he wrote. Something good is that he says different things in all the paragraphs.
Bad points: He do not start the essay with an argument. and he never uses quotes. Quotes are a crucial thing on the essays because they approve what you are saying, they “say” to the person that is reading that ,what you said, is TRUE. Also he do not use connectors as “at first”, “finally”.
You will see him light a cigarette
At the hall door careless, leaning his back
Against the wall, or telling some new joke
To a friend, or looking out into the secret night.
But always his eyes turn
To the dance floor and the girls drifting like flowers
Before the music that tears
Slowly in his mind an old wound open.
His red sunburnt face and hairy hands
Were not made for dancing or love-making
But rather the earth wave breaking
To the plough, and crops slow-growing as his mind.
He has no girl to run her fingers through
His sandy hair, and giggle at his side
When Sunday couples walk. Instead
He has his awkward hopes, his envious dreams to yarn to.
But ah in harvest watch him
Forking stooks, effortless and strong –
Or listening like a lover to the song
Clear, without fault, of a new tractor engine.
It is about a farmer that is in a house where there are people, some dancing. He is a man that is not good at love but he is very good as a worker. He is telling jokes to his friends when he sees a very beautifull girl dancing. So he goes to dance with her but he feels something. He feels that he is bad at it and he can not do it. So he keeps the feelings of dance in him and finaly goes away.
This is a presentation were all the literaly devices (or almost all) apeare. Now we can learn more about it. Take a look!!